Great idea, but some of this stuff is pretty stupid in a mostly serious game. Also, while all of the words are in English, the collective isn't... and it takes some interprteting to figure out what was meant in several cases.
So, I just rewrote it, using the original as a template. I cut out the goofy stuff and replaced it with things more in line with the general mood of Mage.
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