The first thing the reader notices is that the formatting is absolutely bare bones: black text on white, with no border or art. It could use copyediting (things such as "united states" and "hermetics" without capitalization occur, for example, but even then also "Verbena" so it is inconsistent) and if you aren't into books that revel in being gross for the sake of grossness, this is absolutely not a supplement for you. Characters in this scenario flout the various rules of secrecy that make the World of Darkness function, and it plays in stereotypes. It's only the loosest framework for a story, and ends very abruptly as well.
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