Let me begin by saying that I adore the premise of this bloodline. The setting information is well-crafted, and the system section is largely enjoyable. The PRETENSE discipline is interesting, though I feel it could use a little more fine tuning to be in line with existing power levels of disciplines.
The two places where I see the greatest opportunity for improvement are an editing pass (the back half of the book seems fairly typo-laden, especially the character templates where some stats are missing) and the overall layout/design. The book is presented entirely in single column layout, which makes it look more like a Storyteller's homebrew notes than a finished product. With the beautiful templates provided by white-wolf, it seems that this was a dent in the quality of the book that could have been easily avoided (and could easily be remedied)
I do recommend this product, and I hope it will get some revisions soon!